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« on: November 05, 2006, 01:48 » |
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http://babysimpson.co.uk/index.php?page=twinsThis is my fic which has a slightly different timeline, first off, Lisa & Maggie are twins. Which will explain a lot of things.  There's a second draft so read that instead of the first. There's a few bits of art hovering around on TCB, and some DVD stuff as well. I so need to get that 3rd draft typed up. -Downbeat
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« Reply #1 on: November 10, 2006, 14:54 » |
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Just a little question... is there the second draft anywhere in the prose format, or only the script format is available? Because... well, you know my hatred towards scripts, even if it's Simpsons fanfiction  If there is no any, I will download the script version... but I can't promise I will read it to the end.  |
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« Reply #2 on: November 12, 2006, 15:48 » |
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Nope. No prose for the 2nd & 3rd drafts. I find scripts better. |
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« Reply #3 on: May 26, 2007, 11:16 » |
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ALMRead your revised story today. Nice work  As I can see, you didn't change the plot much, only fixed some questionable moments and added new parts. Some of them are... very sweet, I must admit that especially when they are performing on the stage. I'd like to see Lisa singing "God Bless the Child" while Maggie is playing. What I liked: it seems to be a good, complete story, nicely built and also well-formatted. What I didn't: the plot about Bart getting into the prison still confuses me a lot What I've found questionable: you used several official songs and dialogs from the show for your story. But that seems to be intentional, so I guess it only makes your story more "special", what I usually like. Gary, if you want to see "The Simpsons Twins" in the LTS Library, please post a .doc version here as an attachment. Overall - very good work, maybe more "accurate" than "creative", but still very good.  
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« Reply #4 on: May 26, 2007, 11:26 » |
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What I've found questionable: you used several official songs and dialogs from the show for your story. But that seems to be intentional, so I guess it only makes your story more "special", what I usually like.
That was the idea. You can just steal my bandwidth, I dont care, I have 1TB worth. I'd prefer it if you did, (direct link is http://babysimpson.co.uk/staff/gary/twins2.doc) but I'll make an attachment anyhow, though I might not update it in the future. |
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« Reply #5 on: May 26, 2007, 11:32 » |
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ALMYeah, I know I could just link to the story on your server. But if you post it here, the library engine will be able to calculate the downloads/replies count. Thanks for posting it. By the way, what about splitting the story into several smaller pages - I mean the online version on TCB? I just noticed that the page is 100+ Kb size. Or at least add a page compression, you know where to find the script.
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« Reply #6 on: May 26, 2007, 11:37 » |
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Include the one on my site as a mirror maybe? vX makes navigating areas of the site much more efficient, the actual file itself is 76kb in X, the other stuff is the design. The thing could do with splitting into several chunks or something... I dunno. I have other things I wanna do first. |
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« Reply #7 on: May 26, 2007, 15:14 » |
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ALMYour story is in the Library now. Please check it out and if you want to change something or have suggestions, post here or send me an IM.
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« Reply #8 on: May 26, 2007, 15:35 » |
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Cheers. Thats about right, you got my last name spelt correctly, but there's an M. in between. (Gary M. Gadsdon) Also thats PM. <hits with stick> |
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« Reply #9 on: May 27, 2007, 22:13 » |
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I just readed your story, ALM. I almost started crying, what happened to Maggie at the end. Lisa has a good life, I don't know, what happened to Bart. Homer died by getting gasoline in his mouth and Marge....I don't know that either. Good job!! I really like that story.  |
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« Reply #10 on: May 28, 2007, 00:02 » |
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I was going to write a sequel where we saw how Maggie died. (I did write that part, and it's available on my forum somewhere. This one would've been canon. What happened to Maggie is shown at the beginning of course, this whole thing is explained through Flashbacks. Maggiecute is writing another sequel that isnt canon, called the Simpson Twins: The Next Generation, and I was gonna write another non-canon story: The Simpson Twins: Time Travellers but decided not to. |
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« Reply #11 on: May 29, 2007, 16:27 » |
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ARGH! SPOILERS! I was just going to read the story and i will, but please people, don't post spoilers I never like character assassination in stories... |
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« Reply #12 on: May 30, 2007, 00:16 » |
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Its no secret really, and Maggie wasn't assassinated, but by reading the story you can find out. |
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« Reply #13 on: May 30, 2007, 08:49 » |
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"character Assassination" Is even when the writer kills off the character The writer of a fic is a god, what the characters do in it it's still his doing Anyway, i'll surely read up on it! |
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Did he open up his eyes?
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« Reply #14 on: June 19, 2007, 16:34 » |
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it is so cool u rule @ drawing you should enter some drawing competitions!!!!!!!!!!!  ) |
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« Reply #15 on: January 11, 2008, 11:37 » |
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3rd Draft Rewrite in progress. So far, I've written up the entire slightly tweaked 9F08. So we're now entering the present. So to speak, even though it's really 1992. |
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