So...do you hate the Simpsons or something?

I will, however, answer that question. No, I do not hate the simpsons. On the contrary I still remember almost every word to each episode from the first 8 seasons. I do have a tendency to get very sick of things very fast due to limitations.I can only do so much to the main characters to the simpsons, adding one or two off the wall characters of my own design does not allow for me to write effectively. Everyone crits on things like, how well Lisa is portrayed, the things they do, the how they react to different things. I need to work on something that is more open to the genre that I am used to. A mix of regular life story mixed with a sci-fi/fantsy twist.
 

Let's return this topic to normal please. I would like to get a little bit of feedback for even the spoiler.

Thats that cleared up then

About your story, I think it is unwise to have a real president in a story eccpecialy a sitting one. I think you should make up a ficticious president to avoid legal issues. Orther than that, the story is fairly good. Very dark and gritty! Please continue!

It depends what you write and what country you're in. Google gives me the following about the US - they probably wouldn't have caught you out, but always good to be informed about the borders surrounding such matters:
http://dictionary.law.com/definition2.asp?selected=723&bold=%7C%7C%7C%7C
http://www.rcfp.org/handbook/c02p04.html
I personally think a fictional president would be better. It's the only way to be certain. people will know who you're talking about anyway

Here is a little fic that I did after discovering a new song. A basic dream/song fic. For clarification, Angel is the other wolf that will appear in the story very soon. Airidon was the one who finished creating her after he had escaped from his prison.

Here is a part that I have spent so much time working on. It may or may not end up in the story, but it means so much to me and my heart is broken in it.

The True Angel

Edit: I took it down for now, I think I should let the story develop a bit first. I will repost the story soon. If you did happen to be one of the few people that Downloaded it, please make no comments on it yet. leave your thoughts untill later.

It has officially been too long since i updated this story. My newfound un-employment has left me with ample time to work on it, in and amongst the job search. So to make this short, here is chapter one and two.

Chapter One (Meet Aridon)
Chapter Two (Saving Grace)

I have read chapter 1&2 ( i will save 3 for another time) I like where the story is going so far. I can picture the characters and the scene very well, especially the family life bit.

Even though they are short and the descriptions not lengthy, you have captured the details of the story well. I look forward to reading chapter 3 onwards when i get more time.

Keep it up

ahhh couldnt resist. Downloaded chapter 3. And it is good, though one very small grape, there is no indication what has happened since chapter 2, its like they do not link together and it a different story, maybe a little introduction at the start of the chapter to tie it back somehow to chapter 2 and explain the change in direction and why.

Otherwise I loved the chapter, again I got visuals in my head of the ship, the damage and the cryotubes ect. Again, short but very descriptive of the feeling of the scenes

heh heh, sorry I am just one of those impatient readers

really cannot wait to read it as a whole

fantastic chapter, short but sweet. The character information warms me up to the characters even more, and gives me a picture in my mind of who they are and what they look like.

Had to smile at the end when his arm fell off again, can just imagine chatting someone and my arm falling off and me casually pixking it up and putting it back on.

 

Well for a little while I am back to the Site, At least until I leave for BCT, then after 10 weeks, I'll be back again. In my waiting time, I have been writing. Here is the Next chapter in the Windrunner Chronicles.
I wrapped it up a bit abruptly and my mind was reeling with some odd mathmatical junk while writing this, so I added a bit of age conversions for at least one character so that you (the reader) can kind of get a basic view of life on the planet and some of the more technical aspects of it, like lifespan and such. Once I get some sleep, I'll be actually redoing a bit of the last paragraph or so, that way it doesnt look like i wrote it while drunk.

Chapter 5: The Wreckage

Aww, your the best Carl. After actually reading what I wrote (I wasnt really paying much attention to what I was writing), I realized that I think I almost broke the 4th wall. I didnt really think about it when I mentioned the Soft Science Nightmare script joke. And like I said that whole Mathematical conversion bit, I was so tired that my brain was actually running at mach speeds thinking that stuff up at 2 am

Well here is yet another chapter in the ever continuing saga of the Windrunner Chronicles. A bit more action in this one and as a little show of it(And cuz I am taking serge's advice), I will be including a little tidbit for you to check out.

Chapter 7 Fight or Flight


Cali dove sideways throwing Shira to the ground. “Zip,” The sound of a bullet went whipping past them and it hit the ground only feet from where they had been standing.
“How fast can you run?” Cali asked getting up off of her.
“About 15 miles an hour.” Cali grimaced and pulled her up.
“Get on my back and hold on.”

Hey all, i'm back in the world of writing again and I have more to put out to you.

Forgive the lack of Spell checking, I no longer have my Word program, and I have to wait until this next week or so to get it.

Chapter 8: Meeting New Friends?

Edit: I Downloaded a free copy of OpenOffice, so I at least have a spell checker. Current Copy is the spell checked one.

EDIT2: I have been a busy bee this lovely day. Actually i have been confined for the weekend due to my wisdom teeth coming out. So i can do nothing but play games and write.
here is another chapter to my story

Edit 3: upon reading my ending to chapter 9 while not high from pain killers, i realized that i reall had no where to go after i finished with that. it would have made no sense. so once im done reworking it, then ill repost it.