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« on: August 26, 2007, 17:56 »
This is sort of non-cononical to the Simpsons Fantasy story, but it does work as a sequel to it.

Basically after the events of Simpsons Fantasy, Bart returns to his post as Bartman, but for this adventure, (whatever it is) will require Maggeena to rejoin the The Bart Allegiance.

I've not decided on where I want to take this yet.

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INT. SIMPSONS TV ROOM

The Simpsons are sitting on the couch sans LISA and MARGE who arent in the room, MARGE is actually in the kitchen. HOMER, BART and MAGGIE are sitting on the couch watching TV, there's a series of baby related commercials on TV.

MAGGIE: <Sigh>
BART: Mag, whats wrong?
MAGGIE: Huh? Oh nothing Bart. It's just watching these commercials reminds me of the old days.
BART: It's only been a month...
MAGGIE: For you maybe, to me it feels like years.

The previous commercial ends, the next one plays, it turns out to be baby-stink-breath.

LYRICS: Look out its the baby, who's breath smells like death, run for your life it's baby-stink-breath!
BART: WHAT THE?!
HOMER: Uh-oh...
BART: Homer, you're airing that commercial again?
HOMER: C'mon boy, I needed the money.

BART flies at HOMER starting to strangle him.

HOMER: <aaak aaak aaak>

Suddenly outside there is a light in the distance with Bart's head shape cut out of it. It's the Bartsignal.

BART: <thinking> The Bartsignal! Bartman is needed.
BART: <spoke> Gotta go.
HOMER: Whew! Saved by the.... <To Maggie> Actually, what was I saved by?

MAGGIE shrugs.

MAGGIE: I'unno.

INT. SIMPSONS HOUSE

BART runs through the Simpsons house, and into his bedroom, LISA spots him and runs to her own bedroom, BART goes into his closet and closes the door. When he returns, he has a purple cape and cowl on and then jumps out of the window. LISA at the same time has an orange eye mask on and an orange cape, also with a white turban on, she dives out of her own bedroom window.

EXT. SIMPSONS HOUSE - BACKYARD

BART and LISA turn to each other.

BARTMAN: Glad you noticed the Bartsignal, Lisa the Conjurer.
LISA THE CONJURER: As always Bartman.

BARTMAN and LISA THE CONJURER climb up to the treehouse where MILHOUSE is pointing the Bartsignal tourch out the window.

INT. TREEHOUSE

BARTMAN: I have come old friend.
MILHOUSE: Bartman! Lisa!
BARTMAN: So what evil doings appear to be going on tonight Milhouse.
MILHOUSE: There's a letter for you Bartman, in the Bartcave...
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« Reply #1 on: October 01, 2007, 00:48 »
I've now come up with a plausible story, based on a dream I had the other day.
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BARTMAN opens a trapdoor in the floor of the treehouse, underneath there is a whole in the tree trunk with a ladder going down inside, BARTMAN, LISA THE CONJURER and MILHOUSE climb down.

INT. BARTCAVE

MILHOUSE: Over here Bartman.

MILHOUSE runs over to a desk containing various girl items that belong to LISA. MILHOUSE picks up a sheet of paper with fancy writing written on it. BARTMAN scratches his read unable to read it.

BARTMAN: I cant read this it's too fancy.

BARTMAN hands the paper over to LISA THE CONJURER.

BARTMAN: You read it Lisa.

LISA THE CONJURER takes the sheet from BARTMAN's hands.

LISA THE CONJUERER: It says: "Bartman, we have uncovered the secret of your identity, and have kidnapped your mother and replaced her with a robot...."

At this point we cut to the Simpsons kitchen where MARGE is at the table with several cans of HOMER's beer, drinking them then letting out burps of fire.

ROBOT MARGE: Braaaap!

We cut back to the Treehouse.

LISA THE CONJURER: "... If you wish to rescue her come to the abandoned Box Factory. Yours, Cranker"
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« Reply #2 on: October 01, 2007, 10:11 »
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So far it looks okay, although you know what I think about script format :/
My opinion: the "plot" doesn't sound too original, but it can be worked into an interesting story anyway. Heck, even a single good joke, or an unexpected turn can make it a great story. Does your story have it or not, that's the question...
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« Reply #3 on: October 01, 2007, 10:54 »
I dont know how far I'm going to take it, so it might just be the length of an Ullman short or something.

It's a continuation of Simpsons Fantasy, so I'll try to work in references to that here and there, I already have in the first Maggie scene.

The Plot is basically your classic comic book cliché. But for some reason, it made it's way into my dreams, though I'm changing the characters since the dream featured myself..

I use script format, because it's easier for me to write. Tongue
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« Reply #4 on: March 12, 2008, 16:16 »
It's been a while since I did anything with Bartman: The Return of Maggeena. But I have finished it now. Tongue

It is in Script format.
* maggeena.txt (14.58 KB - downloaded 50 times.)
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« Reply #5 on: April 09, 2008, 22:15 »
Huh... kind of an odd plot, don't really know what to say since it's not that original . :/ You said it's classic comic book cliché, I don't read comic books, but it does remind me a bit of the old Batman TV series. ^^
I've got no problem with script format, a closer narrative is nice, but script format shoves everything plain and simple into your face, and your imagination can just make whatever it wants out of it. More relaxed than following something all too detailed. Still, it's nothing too involving, bit funny visualizing things like the quick swap-scene of the Marge-bot drinking beer and belching flames, or Maggeenas brilliant sneaking plan (Tongue), but there's as much as I can say. ;|
Dunno if I missed something, but how come Maggie suddenly remembers what she "used to do"? o_O

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« Reply #6 on: April 10, 2008, 03:50 »
Dunno if I missed something, but how come Maggie suddenly remembers what she "used to do"? o_O

I guess I should mention something, Bartman: Return of Maggeena is a sequel to Simpsons Fantasy which is another story I wrote parodying the Final Fantasy series and even featuring cameos from various characters from IV to VIII. The line "What I used to do" is referring to that, in an essence (there's a small sneaking section in Simpsons Fantasy where Lisa and Maggie go undercover).

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I like to make lots of references to other entities that I like, much like the show does (which mostly does Citizen Kane), Bartman: Return of Maggeena features various Metal Gear Solid references, particularly with the guards "What's that sound" and the water in the vent, which is explained to purify the air, which I doubt is actually true. The reference to Roald Dahl is actually true but you'd need to have read Charlie and the Great Glass Elevator to get that. Then there's of course the fire belching Marge Bot, which I think is pretty obvious in being Futurama.

I did have other ideas to implement during the party at Moe's, such as Maggie talking to Moe about his babysitting sessions, Marge telling Maggie that she has to go to school.

I mostly rely on parody and random visual humour which can be probably why the speech can sometimes lack jokes, seem out of character or just plain pointless. But the randomness is generally what I find funny as you don't expect it and has nothing to with anything, which is what I plan to do when making issues of an MT2 Comic series.
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