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ametur_poet
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I beg to dream and differ from the hollow lies...
« on: August 29, 2007, 13:49 »
I'm a little embarrassed about this, but here's some poetry I've written within the past year or two.
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« Reply #1 on: August 29, 2007, 13:55 »
ametur_poet those were Lovely Poems! I really liked the First one about the River of Life!
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« Reply #2 on: August 29, 2007, 15:10 »
ametur_poet
You know there is the Poetry topic here in Lisa's Family... I started it quite awhile ago but it never took off, figured that no one was interested.
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Look at that hand, lying there
The room is dark, she shows no fear
I'm lying still, my eyes are wide
My heart is pumping, I'm still alive

I'm still awake against my will
What will it ever take
To still this burning in me?
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« Reply #3 on: August 29, 2007, 15:25 »
Well, you still don't mind if I post my poetry here, right?
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« Reply #4 on: August 29, 2007, 15:45 »
ametur_poet
No... I had just hoped that that thread would have some deal of life to it. Oh well.
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Look at that hand, lying there
The room is dark, she shows no fear
I'm lying still, my eyes are wide
My heart is pumping, I'm still alive

I'm still awake against my will
What will it ever take
To still this burning in me?
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« Reply #5 on: August 30, 2007, 04:47 »
pretty good work there AP. There are a few things that I would consider taking a second look at, but other wise very good. One spot in particular caught my attention as far as a fix up, "Who do you know you are Fighting for, If you will not fight again?" The meaning is there but, I think that you should not have "Who" at the beginning. It kind of scrambles the words and makes the reader have to double take on it.
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« Reply #6 on: January 19, 2008, 12:16 »
Good work ,I wanna to know how does new ideas about poetry come into ur mind?
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« Reply #7 on: January 19, 2008, 12:27 »
kent007
"UR mind"? Unified Research? Ukrainian Republic? Ultimate Reduction? Big Grin
Please, if you registered and decided to post here, obey the grammar rules like any normal person does. Many members here are not native English speakers to understand such "simplified english". Thank you Wink

ametur_poet
I should pay more attention to this section.
Nice poems, I liked the "Crow on The Roof" the most, also "River of Life" is interesting too.
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« Reply #8 on: January 19, 2008, 12:45 »
Quote from: Dagdamor on January 19, 2008, 12:27
kent007
"UR mind"? Unified Research? Ukrainian Republic? Ultimate Reduction? Big Grin
Please, if you registered and decided to post here, obey the grammar rules like any normal person does. Many members here are not native English speakers to understand such "simplified english". Thank you Wink
I think he means the word "Your" Big Grin
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« Reply #9 on: January 19, 2008, 12:54 »
* Dagdamor starts searching for the missing "Yo!"
...okay, back to the topic Smile
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