So, as promised, here is the rewrite of Chapter 6. I had time, also, to include a fair chunk of 7, but don't take it as a final draft. I have noticed that the closer to the end of this thing I get the more spots that need minor tweaks for continuity there seem to be and this has resulted in about three decent rewrites so far. Once again, please bear with me as the final details of my story unfold...

Oh, and I have done some thinking on the title and have one picked out. Sorry if it seems corny, but I don't think it's been used yet.

Death of a Simpson (Salesman, if you don't get the reference)

I haven't acually seen the play but it's supposed to be dramatic I believe so it should make an appropriate title. I also gave simple titles to each chapter currently done.

Chapter One- 'Collision'
Chapter Two- 'Sanctuaries'
Chapter Three- 'A Bright New Day'
Chapter Four- 'Worlds Apart'
Chapter Five- 'Trapped'
Chapter Six- 'United'
Chapter Seven- 'Comedy and Tragedy'

Hello again everyone! Today I have for you... the climax, I suppose, for this little story I am telling. There is going to be one more chapter after this so please be patient. I have to get it just right.
The title of that final chapter (8) will be 'Four Simple Words' for those that are curious.

Edit: Fair warning for the kids... this is not a child's story and there is a little swearing and violence throughout the plot.

I may smooth the transition a little during cleanup. Any suggestions? Don't forget... there is one more chapter to come. Loose strings ya know.

Edit: I am curious, its been out for a while but, did anyone catch the reference before the Ms. Hoover scene regarding the boy Stew?

I'll toss everyone a bone and say; the arguement could be made that his last name is Griffin...

Oh, and good luck with the picture!

But of course! Though in my head he will always sound like he did in the first season.

Both characters are the same age in their respective series, so it could happen...

Hooray for random cameos!

Chapter 8 is finished, as far as a rough draft can go. As always, there will probably be some streamlining and revisions if later material makes it nessisary.

The song a little ways into the scene, sung by Maggie, is a personal favorite for me.


Giving credit where credit is due:
"Calling All Angels" by Jane Siberry off of her 1993 album 'When I Was a Boy', is the song that plays in the background at the end of the movie 'Pay it Forward' starring Kevin Spacey, Helen Hunt, and Haley Joel Osment.

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=jReLRxrCJqU

This is a link to a YouTube video of the song I just dug up.

Anyways, here is the chapter. I hope it is up to par with what I have done so far... feel free to let me know, as always. There is still a good chunk left to come, though.

I agree! Didn't know she changed her name, though.

If you find time, perhaps you can PM me some of the more plot-related stuff? I'd love some detailed feedback and you've been so helpful throughout the writing process, Carl!

My goodness man, If I had the time and ability to do all the writing that you do, My story would have turned into a book that would rival War and Peace. This is the 3rd time Ive had to DL this thing and I still havent read it all yet. Though Like I said, i have been busy writing my stuff and going to class all night.