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« on: July 14, 2008, 04:49 » |
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So after a few days of browsing the site I have been (as the topic says) inspired to attempt a short story of my own. I haven't settled on the final details so all I can say is that it will be my take on the whole 'Sideshow Bob' series of episodes from the series. Being my first try I won't go for any of the alternate realities (winged Lisa, twins, ect.), instead I may go for a grittier, more realistic setting.
Just a note to new readers, each update is the entire story up to that point so if you don't want several copies you are better off skimming to the end for the most recent update.
Oh and fair warning for the kids, this is not a child's story.
Update: Attached to this post is now the most recent version of my story. Thanks in advance for reading and I hope you enjoy it!
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« Reply #1 on: July 14, 2008, 22:51 » |
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Okay, I look forward to see and read your story  If you have questions, or need help/advises, feel free to ask. It will be your first Simpsons fanfic, right? If you accept requests right now, I'd ask only two things: prose format and the story being not too long. 
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« Reply #2 on: July 14, 2008, 23:16 » |
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I know I have a fairly distinctive style of speech, so with that in mind, I will pay attention to prose.
The only problem I may have is actually getting the story converted and posted here. But I'll work something out.
The story at its current build is actually a small segment of an ongoing story that I have been wanting to rewrite and expand upon.
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« Reply #3 on: July 14, 2008, 23:45 » |
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Okay, minor details have begun to develop. The time placement is roughly seven years in future from the series. So Bart is a Junior, age 16-17. Lisa is a Freshman, age 14-15. And Maggie is in the second grade, age 7-8. There will be a few well-known characters. Such as Krusty (I'm going to enjoy writing this bitter, jaded funnyman), and Milhouse will be his usual awkward self.
I'll begin laying out chapter one tonight, hopefully. Any suggestions are welcome as I start to post what I've done.
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« Reply #4 on: July 15, 2008, 01:08 » |
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You can just attach it to your posts, in full reply, click Additional Options.
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« Reply #5 on: July 18, 2008, 06:59 » |
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CalculatedChaosRead the first chapter. So far it's going on nicely; you seem to be either experienced writer or just have good words in your arsenal.  The characterization is alright too; will be waiting for other chapters before posting more making-sense review of your story. Good luck!
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« Reply #6 on: July 18, 2008, 23:21 » |
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A little from column A, a little from column B. I tend to write my best stuff during my manic-depressive phases. 
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« Reply #7 on: July 19, 2008, 07:30 » |
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CalculatedChaosI tend to write my best stuff during my manic-depressive phases.  The best artists are always the most troubled. I haven't read Chapter One yet, but I'm going to have a lot of spare time this weekend and I'm sure I could fit in your story. I'll post a review within the next few days.
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« Reply #8 on: July 19, 2008, 18:52 » |
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Here's a large update. The first chapter I posted has been relegated to the dreaded 'prologue' heading until such time as I find a better place for it. So without further ado... I present chapters 1-4 (though 4 isn't quite done yet). Oh... and here; http://realities.simpworks.com/image/405 This is the picture that inspired the scene in chapter two.
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« Reply #9 on: July 20, 2008, 01:02 » |
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You definately have a good talent for putting words to paper... or words to screen I should day. So far I have found it engaging and well written. I am REALLY looking forward to the next installment(s). One thing you have managed well is that you seem to have made the story connectg with the reader, well at least with me. When Lisa felt really sad I found myself with damp eyes and really felt for her. When she was happy again it immediately cheered me up.... You have succeeded well in passing the emotion through the words to the brain  You have also given me some inspiration to brainstorm some more ideas for my Relitive Insanity script... This looks like the kind of story that will inspire people to make some pictures for  -Carl
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« Reply #10 on: July 20, 2008, 01:37 » |
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Thank you! You're very kind, now off with you! Write my friend, write! Good luck!  P.S- I'm struggling for a title by the by. It's leaning towards 'Fate' or something. :/ Suggestions?
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« Reply #11 on: July 20, 2008, 01:46 » |
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Twisted Fate? LOL I don't know. I'll try to help you. Anyway, I've read the first chapter, and I've got to say, it's turning out to be interesting. I still haven't read this draft you posted. But I'll get to it, don't worry.
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« Reply #12 on: July 20, 2008, 05:35 » |
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This looks like the kind of story that will inspire people to make some pictures for  I, personally, am satisfied with how close I got to Simpreal's intended scene, its alot easier to write around a picture than it is to draw one based on a description. I dunno. That's just the way I write. And I wouldn't be opposed to someone who wanted to make such a picture. In fact I would be honored. 
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« Reply #13 on: July 21, 2008, 03:06 » |
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fate would be a great title, I think. You're exactly as good as Gary, I think. Good characterization, especially Maggie, and a matching choice of words. if you continue like this, it's gonna be a great work.
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« Reply #14 on: July 21, 2008, 03:48 » |
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A little preview- the next scene will be another Maggie one. She is actually very interesting to write for as I pretty much have only guesses to go on for her character. I hope I'm doing her justice, being the youngest would be difficult. Especially with Bart and Lisa for siblings. (I'm the oldest of 3 boys if you're curious.) Its nearly done, anyways, hope you enjoy it. 
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