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« on: July 28, 2007, 18:30 »
Phew Smile God knows for how long I wanted to publish my only story here. Thanks to George (and many other people), finally I have more or less decent version - spelling and grammar wise, of course. If you have any thoughts, opinions or suggestions, feel free to post them here.

The story is based on two drawings. First and second.
Have fun reading Smile
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« Reply #1 on: July 28, 2007, 19:19 »
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And at last it is published! Smile

Very glad to see your hard work has finally paid off Serge, and I'm glad I could be a part of helping you edit it. I for one believe the story is very well written, and has only improved with corrections. I sincerely hope the rest of you enjoy reading it as much as I did.
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« Reply #2 on: July 28, 2007, 20:37 »
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I doubt I can read all this in english Tongue But I've re-read original russian version not so long ago, and I like it very much. I don't remember, had I told this already or not, but all characters are very believable, family spirit presents and all story is easy to imagine. Except one part when she is jumping Sad I hardly accepted suicide attempt in "Lisa Fitzgerald", but there she hadn't family. But in your case she had loving people, and I don't think she could hurt her family that way, when they supported her so much.

And especially from all story I love Bart's behavior - he is really great written, I love that scenes, when he helped her with her wings. He impressed me much more than even Lisa Tongue Nope, all the characters are well-balanced and it's easy to believe it's really OFF.
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« Reply #3 on: July 30, 2007, 15:23 »
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Thanks!

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First of all, thanks for the reply. I agree about Lisa's unprovoked suicide attempt, looks like a perfect characterization flaw to me now. Maybe I should have searched for another way for her to return back to normal... oh well. I doubt I will change the story much, so I'll just remember this for the future. About Bart - hmm, people usually tell me that he doesn't look like himself in the story, too caring and thoughtful. But I also like him more this way. Smile
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« Reply #4 on: July 30, 2007, 17:50 »
If only I had a printing device...

Ah well, guess I'll have to endure lots of eye pain while reading from the screen. Big Grin Thanks for uploading this, always wanted to read this. Smile

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« Reply #5 on: August 28, 2007, 09:01 »
I shall repeat that I have written on IFSF.
This story - the best, that I of a code or read!
The surprising story! Many the interesting and intriguing moments, unexpected subject turns (For example when there have arrived vans), are very brightly described the moments and characters.
When I it read all, there was such sensation, that all it occured actually!
Dagdamor, thank for this story!

Estimation of the story - 100 on a 10-ball scale! Gigi

Dagdamor, write even more than such interesting stories, they will turn out not worse it, here that I precisely know! Smile
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« Reply #6 on: August 28, 2007, 09:15 »
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TheSimpsFan, come on Smile This board has a lot of much better stories. Look around and you'll see.
Thanks for you feedback (even such a non-constructive one Wink), but you're exaggerating.
And no, I'm not going to write anything in the near future. From the certain point, I had to choose between programming and writing. *Moe's voice* I've made my choice.
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« Reply #7 on: August 28, 2007, 09:21 »
Yes. I see, that here is what to esteem. All right, I shall read "Simpson Moon" and "A Kind of Blue" Lisa. But anyway, this story has very much liked me. Wink
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« Reply #8 on: August 28, 2007, 13:05 »
*Shameless Promotion* How about "Summer of 4 ft. 3"? It's a sequel to the original episode. [Just a note, it's a comedy script, not drama.]
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« Reply #9 on: November 15, 2008, 23:00 »
Amazing, simply amazing - such heartiness in this story. It abuts often on real episodes but have its' own elements. Many a situation I think that you could write more, for example in part one, but otherwise and especially in the last parts you elaborate your story in an exellent wise. It has humor it has heart and an appropriate assemblage of tradegy essentials.  Smile
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« Reply #10 on: November 16, 2008, 06:22 »
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Hey, it has only two or three references to the actual episodes, not more Tongue
But seriously, thank you so much for your comment! I'm happy you liked it.
I don't think I will ever touch it again, though, I already bothered too much people with it asking for different kind of help. That said, I want to thank once again those people who helped me a lot - Chris, Rich and especially Adam (George Smile).
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« Reply #11 on: November 20, 2008, 21:16 »
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Chris, Rich and especially Adam (George Smile).
Always a pleasure, Serge. Smile I'm just glad I could be a part of getting it edited and posted. Already seems like so long ago - you should try writing another one. I'm sure the people on this forum would love to read it.
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« Reply #12 on: November 20, 2008, 21:44 »
Quote from: G.H. on November 20, 2008, 21:16
Already seems like so long ago - you should try writing another one. I'm sure the people on this forum would love to read it.

Yes, we would!  Big Grin
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« Reply #13 on: November 26, 2008, 23:52 »
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Thanks for your kind words, but I'd prefer if someone else (someone who knows English a bit better Wink) writes a nice Lisa story instead. Right now, on ISFF, goes a fanfiction contest (started this summer IIRC), maybe it would reveal some nice stories. Although, for some reason, most of the participants are Futurama-fans, not Simpsons ones Rolls Eyes
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