Hello,
D.B..
Well, generally, I have to say I should write a response since the moment your thread dedicated to Gently was created. But because of some unknown reason for me I did not do it. And I'm very sorry about that. Tryin' to rectify the situation.
First of all, I would like to say I always admired the skill of any people to undertake and carry out more-less scale projects. Even it devoted to such trifling (as probably most of usual people thinks) occasion as
fanfiction, esp Lisa-fanfiction. And I say frankly I think your story merits the definition "large scale project" (though the absolute majority of the fanfics not at all too voluminous). 'Cause to create something always not easy.
Well, when I read your story I've experienced the whole range of feelings. It was both a constant emotional stress and expectation of that there will be something irreparable, and doubt in reality of events occuring with Lisa (that it not her bad dream). And, certainly, the fear.
About fear I would like to tell especially.
The story is similar to the real horror film, but this is not just an action with no reference to character and personality of the main heroine. It contains much more of the standard facilities of expression. Here is opens the character of Lisa herself. We have an opportunity to think together with her, to feel the horror and to have the courage to undertake the resolute actions. And it was very much pleasant to me in a story. Looks more similar to a psychological thriller.
I think the main enemy of Lisa was her own mind. Though I certainly realize in what heavy condition she find oneself - frozen, almost got fainting-fit because of the weariness, exhausted by pain from cuts and undergo such psychological stress. But it seems to me a huge plenty of ideas had its negative role too. It simply didn't give her the boldness to start to act at necessary point. Contrary to each idea she found opposite one, far from being always objectively, though very reasonable explained.
I really admired how you have shown Lisa's all fears and her uncertainty. All has turned out very plausibly, not forced, here and there enough roughly. Other members of the family have turned out well too, although much less attention was paid to them.
At one moment I felt my heart is about to become torn. It was when Homer was seen Lisa sitting on her bed almost safe and sound after a stage where the creature drags Lisa under a bed. I really thought that there was happened something irremediable... The moment when Lisa was dragged away and was on the verge of doom I was simply calm. But with a terrible feeling inside...
Very pleased that fortunately everything turned out all right and you have rescued her

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The story is admirable, simply admirable. And, by the way, at present it is my most favourite horror fic with Simpsons. Hope you'll continue to please all of us with the new creations. Regardless of the fact that such moment maybe will come up not so soon.
Marvelous story, very impressive and heartbreaking. And gently

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