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« on: October 30, 2006, 13:39 » |
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This is just my collection of fanfiction stories about what Lisa remembers from her early life. It's a bit of nostalgia here and there, the heartwarming kind. This is next is the first of its kind. 
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« Reply #1 on: October 30, 2006, 22:47 » |
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Nice story - short but still very interesting to read. I always liked when the author manages to put a good amount of events, emotions and even a little plot in a story without making it too long and boring, and this was just the case. Good job, and I look forward for more. 
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« Reply #2 on: November 02, 2006, 05:58 » |
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Thanks, Dagdamor! I was hoping that someone liked it. 
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« Reply #3 on: November 04, 2006, 12:44 » |
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* Dagdamor wonders where all the reviews gone  Just read the second story - can only say that I liked it a lot, once again. The idea to picture little Lisa learning to play her sax from another skilled musician was cute, and the characterization is still nice. *LOL* at Homer's remark.  Keep it up!
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« Reply #4 on: November 04, 2006, 13:46 » |
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Both stories are short and sweet. The second one reminded me of the time I first got my saxophone  Keep up the good work!
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« Reply #5 on: November 04, 2006, 15:54 » |
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Both stories are good. My favourite - first half of "When It Was All a Dream" - it's like a fuel for imagination.  But it's too short. HyperStrudel This story could be expanded into much larger one.
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« Reply #6 on: November 05, 2006, 00:02 » |
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But it's too short. Hmmm, I'd have to disagree with you on that point as I actually think both these little stories work well. I'm actually quite impressed with the depth of emotion and meaning that can be squeezed into such short pieces, they've got this beautiful, almost poignant, dream-like feel to them. Rather than expand them, I think they'd work well as a collection of pieces and I'm definitely looking forward to reading more.
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« Reply #7 on: November 05, 2006, 13:05 » |
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Rather than expand them, I think they'd work well as a collection of pieces and I'm definitely looking forward to reading more. In this case each piece of the collection should represent something 
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« Reply #8 on: November 06, 2006, 07:34 » |
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Thanks, guys!  Each story has a memory of Lisa's, kind of like those events that build up who you are. I keep them short because I need a mega burst of inspiration. Speaking of which, I think I just got one now. 
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« Reply #9 on: November 06, 2006, 11:24 » |
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I need a mega burst of inspiration That's why I don't write as often either. 
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