Well hello there LisaFan. good to have you here. I looked over your story a bit and it is pretty good.  When i have a bit more time I will give you some real thoughts on it. Hope to see you around more. Keep in mind that there is a Writing competition going on right now and we would love to have you join. check here for details:

http://www.lisa-simpson.net/topic/150.msg2202#msg2202

Oh, alright then.    Ill see if i can join the writing contest.  

LisaFan
Your story was quite good. I've read it, re-read later; and can say that despite certain things, I liked it. I hope it's okay to post my honest thoughts here - like I said many times before, those are just personal opinion and nothing more. So there.

What I liked: your story was easy to read. Perhaps you should try to make paragraphs smaller because right now they are too big and it's easy to get lost in the sentences. But the style you chose to explain your thoughts was nice. Decent spelling and grammar was another good side; if only someone knew how much easier to read it makes a story for me Of course, I also loved the subject, because, well, obsession

Only two things I considered questionable. The first one, like you probably guessed already, is "self-insertion", i.e. putting yourself in the story. Of course the name is different, but still... it's like seeing someone drawing himself hugging Lisa. I try to avoid such kind of art, but these are just personal preferences, someone else will see nothing harmful in that. The second thing is that you "altered" characters a lot to fit your story flow. To me, the real ability to write a nice story is the ability to use the existing characterization, not to create your own for the sake of the plot. In other words, I can believe in Lisa being grateful to someone for saving her, but I hardly believe in Lisa sleeping with that guy the next night. I can believe in Marge being very glad that her daughter is safe, but I hardly believe in her immediately making the guy that was "sleeping out on the backstreets and eating garbage", a part of her family. See? I perfectly understand your emotions towards Lisa in the story, I feel exactly the same. But you should try your best to make the story less "edgy", and more "smooth", plot-wise. I assure you that it's quite possible. The only thing you have to do is to close your eyes and to try to "live" your story for every character involved. For Marge, for Bart. Even for Lisa If you do that, you'll see all plot flaws, and will be able to fix them.

Overall impression: it's a beautiful story for the Lisa-obsessed, but it still needs some work.
Keep it up