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Maggiecute
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« on: March 04, 2007, 12:30 »

This Story takes Place in the Year 2000 where Maggie and Lisa and Bart aren't Homer's and Marge's.

They Belong to a Family called Sundial and their Parents are called Bill and Vineal. One night a Dinner Vineal, slips that the Family's Finance Problems are getting ever worse and Bart needs to find a job a Quickly as Possible.

Vineal in Desparation after a fight has taken place Maggie witnesses her Father Storming from the House in a Temper and Doesn't return.

Going out of her Mind Vineal Puts Bart, Lisa and Maggie up for Adoption but unfortuanly they might have to go to a Children's Home but almost at once their Social Worker Finds a Family Perfect for them. The Simpsons who have been on a Waiting List for over a Year and quite given up hope.

I wanted The Sundial Children to be Fostered rather Quickly by Page Ten because I didn't want to Loyter around the Finace problem for to Long.

Lisa has the Spotlight More in the Story as it Progresses through because she falls from a tree from a great hight and everyone is out looking for her and find her curled up in a bush her leg trapped in a vine the Lisa can't break but this makes it worse as Lisa has got Weak Feet in this Story.

The Ages:

Bart- 12
Lisa- 10
Maggie- 3

I will post the story as soon as it is Finished, It might be a While though but I will keep you updated.


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« Reply #1 on: March 04, 2007, 13:29 »

Hmm... I already have some questions about your story, but I guess it would be better for me to wait for it and read.
The storyline looks promising. I hope Lisa cures her feet in the end, though. The idea of the "nearest future" fanfic is interesting, too... well, keep going on with the story, Maggiecute Smile You don't have to capitalize every second word, though. Only first word in a sentence and names should be capitalized. But that's not a big thing Wink
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« Reply #2 on: March 04, 2007, 13:41 »

Sorry for some reason I have always done Capitals in Sentances but I will try to stop.

You can ask the questions I don't mind.

I think the story has loads of Capitals in it two so I apoligize for that.

Actually I think I will post the story in part's So here is Part One

* Sundial_Part_One.zip (25.03 KB - downloaded 68 times.)
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« Reply #3 on: April 02, 2007, 17:55 »

I'm sorry for the inconviniance but I was wondering if the story was good enough does it have a chance of being on SR please? I'm rewriting it to.
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« Reply #4 on: April 02, 2007, 23:53 »

Maggiecute
I'm sorry about the whole forum's silence about your story, but you're not an exception, for some reason the same thing happens with most of the stories posted here. I still have to reply to Yggdrasill's LisaCon writing entry Embarrassed But writing decent reviews to fanfics isn't easy, while posting simple "nice job" replies is not nice either...

I have downloaded your story, and will try to read/review it soon. Please hold patience Smile
About your story on SR - hmm, I don't think so... Fanfiction Area is the slowest page on that site, and rarely updates Smile and I see nothing bad in that.
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