Thank you Gustavo, i thought everyone had forgot it was my birthday yesterday, but never mind more cake and beer for me.

PS - liked the video, very colourful.

happy belated birthday ... opps-... my best wishes Steven! sorry by forgot it .. really.. but let me fix this  ... lisa and me are sending mountains of hugs, the little girl a kiss and your friend  a handshake!  


"the chocolate cake and the coke are on the party, the good music and the friends into a circle to celebrate your 30 years of life... music and a happy event ... the hope of the future"

ohhh and the song!!!   http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=m44z-223UYE yay party!





*Hugs
Gustavo

Speaking of butterflies: http://www.dailymotion.com/video/x2v4ae_jam-spoon-butterfly-sign_music

*dibujando_un_corazon.png* Ohh sweeeet, how lovely she forms a heart with her fingers and her pinkies (cute word isn't it) going up; how could you even think about that...... luckily you hadn't... and you know what to do Gustavo don't you.

No?

I'm sure you do.

Really?!

Don't kidding me!

Remember?!

Please... 

...finish it

P.S.

Well not that scene anyway. On a really high level I guess your right - if you described the episode in one sentence they would be the same. It isn't that similar when you watch it though. Family guy just pretty much says they have a black ancestor and then makes a bunch of jokes about what it means in the present with the rest of the episode. Whereas the Simpsons explored the past in depth and only at the end reveals that they have a black ancestor.

Quite different really even basically.

Here is lucky 13, the second last chapter.
To Calculated Chaos: When I was writing this I was on a chapter-a-day schedule, so that's why most of them are so short guess I could have merged some of them together. It was my plan to write it like an episode I would like to see made. I hadn't really noticed the separation of the plots in the later episodes, but now that you mention it, I have to agree, that's why they seem so jerky I guess. I LOVE plotlines which interweave, like Lisa says "I just wanted to save those animals while Bart became a drummer, but I never thought the two stories would intersect!" Thanks for the compliment.

Chapter 13

Over then next two weeks Lisa and Colin did manage to catch up with their class and become a valuable part of their group. The experiment was double blind, not only didn't the students and teachers know which students had received the fake IQ scores, but neither did the researchers, eliminating any bias in the experiment. The experiment was being conducted across several schools and grade levels. Unfortunately for Lisa one of the classes was Bart's, and while she didn't know whether he received a fake score, she knew that she could not be completely unbiased towards him. She managed to avoid working with that class by telling everyone that Bart was her younger cousin. They referred to the students by numbers that had been randomly selected by the computer. The names and real IQ scores were in a sealed envelope, which would not be opened until the conclusion of the experiment. They had carefully charted the student's progress for a month before the IQ test, and were continuing to do so afterwards. Lisa had missed the pre-testing, but this was the important part, the results. The work itself was actually quite dull. Entering endless numbers from paper reports into computer spreadsheets. The payoff was the mining of the data. Graphs and charts examining every possible variable, scores by subject, scores by day of the week, scores by age, they even drew up one chart for scores vs. ambient temperature. They wrote page after page of analysis, but the real question was, would the students who received artificially raised IQ's score better than those who had received their real IQ or those which received artificially lowered results. They would find out when they opened the envelope at the end of the experiment. Lisa giggled when she remembered that this wasn't the first experiment she had performed on Bart. Her science fair project one year had been proving that he was dumber than a hamster. She felt kind of bad about that one – but at least this one didn't involve electrical shocks.

xxxxxxx

As Bart's grades improved, his popularity declined. Now he finally understood what his sister meant when she said that happiness and intelligence were inversely proportional but it was too late to do anything about it, a real catch 22.

Now even Milhouse didn't want to hang out with him, and Bart wasn't going to hang out with Martin. Just because he was smart didn't make him a nerd, why didn't anyone get that. All that he had left was to retreat further into his studies, he had almost finished the whole year's worth of work. Last term they were talking about holding him back a grade, but now he was nearly ready to skip forward. Mrs Krabaple's classes had always seemed boring to him because he didn't know what was going on. For a week or so he enjoyed the classes as he powered through the textbooks. Now he found them boring for another reason, he knew the topics too well, and the classes were laughably predictable.

Bart knew there was one person who would understand, Lisa. He thought about how badly everyone treated her and he was ashamed, sometimes had even joined in. He never knew her burden until now. When he tried to find Lisa however, she was nowhere to be found, he gave up as the bell rang, he would find her after class.

School finished and Bart waited outside Lisa's classroom, everyone walked out, except Lisa. Bart looked in and saw all the desks were empty.

"Hey Mrs Hoover," asked Bart "where's Lisa?"

Mrs Hoover looked pretty out of it and Bart wondered if she had been drinking again.

"Oh, she was here," said Mrs Hoover "She's always here."

Bart walked out of the school and got on the bus. Lisa was there and Bart took a seat next to her.

"Hey Lise," said Bart "couldn't see you in Mrs Hoover's class."

"Oh," said Lisa, panicking slightly as if she wasn't used to the constant lies her double life necessitated "I wasn't in that class, I was, uh, helping principle Skinner with something."

"Really?" asked Bart "because Mrs Hoover said you were there."
Lisa knew she was caught, she had to reveal something, but it didn't have to be the truth. She decided to give him part of the truth; if she told him everything it could destroy the experiment.

"I take your pause to mean that you're concocting a lie." needled Bart

Bart had always been good at knowing when people were lying, maybe because he told so many himself.

Lisa sighed.

"OK, you win," admitted Lisa "I've been ditching school, it's just so boring, surely you can relate?"

"Yes," replied Bart. "Believe it or not I've actually ditched school myself a few times."

"A few?" she laughed

"OK, well maybe more than a few," he admitted "but that's not why I wanted to talk about. The thing is, a few weeks ago we had this IQ test."

Ahhhhh, thought Lisa. I can't do this it will influence the experiment. But on the other hand I'm his sister and he needs my support. What do I do? She screamed in her mind. Eventually her paralysing indecision made the decision for her.

"And I did really well," he continued "if you can believe that."

"Oh I can," replied Lisa, she decided to consider this an interview with a test subject; it could actually yield valuable information.

"The thing is though," he said "I tried to work harder in school, and now no-one respects me. I always though you had it easy, but I was wrong. I'm sorry I didn't notice it sooner."

My god, she thought, that's the nicest thing he's ever said to me.

"You're not dying, are you?" asked Lisa teasingly

"Only socially," said Bart "only socially."

Lisa was shocked that Bart had been so open to her about his feelings. It made sense that his newfound intelligence was alienating him from his peers, she just wished there were some way to make it better.

xxxxxxx

Mrs Hoover looked at her roll and sure enough Lisa's name was ticked as always. She thought back over the day. Had Lisa really not been there, I mean she was normally quiet, but she couldn't remember Lisa answering any questions, and when she looked through the work that had been handed in she found Lisa hadn't turned in any. She came to a shocking conclusion Lisa had been cutting school. She couldn't tell the school though, then they would know she hadn't been taking her role properly. This would take a little ingenuity. She dialled the Simpson's number and Marge picked up.

"Hello?" said Marge

"Hello Mrs Simpson," said Mrs Hoover "This is Mrs Hoover, your daughter's teacher."

"What's this about?" asked Marge

"Well it seems your daughter may be cutting school," said Mrs Hoover "but I don't recommend you tell her yet. It's more important to find out where she's going, maybe you could try and follow her."

"I'll make an appointment to see the principal tomorrow morning," said Marge

"Oh, No," said Mrs Hoover "You shouldn't do that, that way she'll find out and you'll never know where she's gone."

"OK," said Marge "I'll do it, but this does seem a little unorthodox."

"Bye" said Mrs Hoover quickly. She hung up.

Mrs Hoover sighed. She reached into her bottom drawer and took out a metal hip flask. She drained half of it.

"The things I do to keep this dead end job." she said to an empty classroom.

In this chapter I really wanted to get things moving, set up for the conclusion, from here its just a rollercoster to the end. But don't worry the last chapter is heaps longer to tie up all the plots.

The chapters are a little short, once you start getting invested in the story it ends abruptly and you've got to wait for the next chapter so it's a little jarring and difficult to immerse yourself in. Still, I can definately picture everything happening like an episode so you manage that nicely.

It's also huge to see that you merge plotlines throughout the story, with Lisa asking assistance from Bart for the proper id's, then later with the use of her id's she is involved in the experiment which screws with Bart. The resulting fallout will be worth the wait from what I remember. Also, a B-plot doesn't have to be completely unrelated, a fact the recent seasons seem to have forgotten if it exists at all. Take pride that you did a good job making this a believable episode.

But the basic plot was still pretty much stolen from Family Guy.

What I was saying is that it worked really well, the emotion worked worked better than it did in alot of other episodes.

steven4554
Thank you!

Gustavo
Well, in fact she was not supposed to look that angry, just a little bit afraid (by the slope difficulty maybe). But she actually looks angry because I'm not yet very good for drawing facial expressions